I'm still having trouble coming up with a new opening line for this, but took out 'breast', and changed 'overtaken' to 'overwhelmed' in line three. I've also changed the last line of the 'wet skin' verse, and switched out 'understand' for 'you see' before the last chorus:
Her stroke's beauty to behold
It lets me see into her soul
I'm overwhelmed by her allure
I pursue a longed-for overture
From her loin comes a great heat
It explodes and then retreats
Fire and water can never be one
There's no fusion, they will not succumb
I have to shiver and seethe alone
And in the water I'm burned
In water I'm burned
Wet skin's beauty to behold
It vows to swallow and enfold
As her long legs move apart
The darkest cavern of her heart
Reveals to me her shadowed fire
A black abyss for my desire
She glides by me without a glance
I'm her shadow, without a chance
I have no hope left and should have none, 'cause
Fire and water can never be one
There's no fusion, they will not succumb
I have to shiver and seethe alone
And in the water I'm burned
In water I'm burned
Her strokes cause waves that surge right through me
Yet every move from her eschews me
I reach for her with cold wet hands
And she will forever elude me
You see
Fire and water can never be one
There's no fusion, they will not succumb
I have to shiver and seethe alone
And in the water I'm burned
In water I'm burned
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