Showing posts with label Liese. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Liese. Show all posts

2010-05-18

Blood & Dust

I've begun work on Roter Sand, and it makes me sad. The song still has the same emotive effect on me that it did before I learned what the lyrics mean. I wrote this in my 'blind' review last year:
To me it sounds like Till's telling a story that hurts like hell in the recounting, but that simply must be told. Imagine to yourself a battle-scarred, drunk veteran remembering his awful career, and you'll probably get the idea of what I'm hearing. This song is a wrench.

The chorus is pretty. It sounds like agony, but is lovely and almost 'anthemic', with the whistling always coming back in as a link to the next verse. The song is one to listen to while feeling maudlin and nostalgic. There's plenty of inspiration for the little weeper in us all.

It's incredible how different Liese, which is now on the 'done' pile*, feels to Roter Sand, given the music is pretty much the same. Here's my blind take on that:
The lyrics are somehow fuller and more fleshy (I get the impression more is said, for some reason), and Till has thrown in a hefty dose of menace, and a smudge of lasciviousness (the only sex on the bonus disc) too. The blatant sorrow of Roter Sand doesn't surface at all, despite the music being identical. A much more sinister film coats Liese and I love it. While I have no doubt that Roter Sand was more in keeping with the album's flow, I consider Liese to be lyrically/vocally much meatier, and I'm really glad they tagged it onto the bonus disc.

More than half of the meat is in the operatics of Till, but a huge amount of the texture comes from the lyrics. I don't just mean the meaning. The verbal choices he has made impact the vibe of the song. It's an interesting experiment in poetry.

I wonder if he wrote other lyrics for this music...

* How long that will last?

LILT: Liese 3.0

Promoted without change:
Sunday out in Ammerwiese
Liese bravely minds the geese there
Then comes Jacob with long strides
Holding his sickle at his side

He nudges now and then with this
At Liese under skirt and bodice
He wants to sample her by forcing
And while he probes her he's singing...

Lovely Liese, leave the geese here
I want to have a taste of your skin
My scythe will be blood-rusted I fear
If you are not welcoming

So Jacob thinks to lick young Liese
Her pear taste will be so pleasing
So many small hairs stand on end
They run to a wheat-filled glen

In the flood of gold, well veiled
Jacob bestrides the youthful maid
And holds her close until the evening
Against her skin he again sings...

Lovely Liese, leave the geese here
I want to have a taste of your skin
My scythe will be blood-rusted I fear
If you are not welcoming

Lovely Liese, leave the geese here
I want to have a taste of your skin
My scythe will be blood-rusted I fear
If you are not welcoming

[original lyrics & translation]

2010-04-06

LILT: Liese 2.0

My friend in Berlin has given me some tips about this one, so I've developed it further, and am feeling pretty good about the changes:
Sunday out in Ammerwiese
Liese bravely minds the geese there
Then comes Jacob with long strides
Holding his sickle at his side

He nudges now and then with this
At Liese under skirt and bodice
He wants to sample her by forcing
And while he probes her he's singing...

Lovely Liese, leave the geese here
I want to have a taste of your skin
My scythe will be blood-rusted I fear
If you are not welcoming

So Jacob thinks to lick young Liese
Her pear taste will be so pleasing
So many small hairs stand on end
They run to a wheat-filled glen

In the flood of gold, well veiled
Jacob bestrides the youthful maid
And holds her close until the evening
Against her skin he again sings...

Lovely Liese, leave the geese here
I want to have a taste of your skin
My scythe will be blood-rusted I fear
If you are not welcoming

Lovely Liese, leave the geese here
I want to have a taste of your skin
My scythe will be blood-rusted I fear
If you are not welcoming

[original lyrics & translation]

Thanks, F! <3

2010-03-31

LILT: Liese 1.2

Sunday out in Ammerwiese
Liese bravely minds the geese there
Then comes Jacob with long strides
Holding his sickle at his side

He nudges with this now and then
At Liese under bodice and hem
He wants to try her, with violence
And all the while he probes her he sings...

Lovely Liese, leave the geese here
I want to have a taste of your skin
My scythe will be blood-rusted I fear
If you are not welcoming

So Jacob yearns to lick young Liese
Her pear taste would be so pleasing
So many small hairs stand on end
They run to a wheat-filled glen

In the flood of gold, well veiled
Jacob bestrides the youthful maid
And holds her there until the evening
Then to the child he again sings...

Lovely Liese, leave the geese here
I want to have a taste of your skin
My scythe will be blood-rusted I fear
If you are not welcoming

Lovely Liese, leave the geese here
I want to have a taste of your skin
My scythe will be blood-rusted I fear
If you are not welcoming

[original lyrics & translation]

2010-03-28

Liese Translation From a Real German

Rony has translated Liese properly for me:
Sunday on the Ammerwiese
Liese upright tends the geese.
Suddenly Jacob comes along
holding a sickle in his hand.

This one he moves from time to time
below Liese its skirt and bodice.
He wants to taste her, wants to force her
and the boy will be singing:

My dear Liese, don't care the geese
I want to taste your skin.
Bloody and rusty the scythe will be
if not friendly you are to me.

Jacob now may lick Liese
and like pears she will taste.
Small hairs stand up and
soon they rush to the wheat field.

In this golden flood* well hidden
he has ridden her.
Until evening he holds her dear
and sings to her...

My dear Liese, don't care the geese
I want to taste your skin.
Bloody and rusty the scythe will be
if not friendly you are to me.

My dear Liese, don't care the geese
I want to taste your skin.
Bloody and rusty the scythe will be
if not friendly you are to me.

*German poetic description for wheat field

This puts a new slant on parts of the song, so I will be making revisions of my own lyrics again soon.

LILT: Liese 1.1

Something else Rony pointed out is that I have used sickle and scythe interchangeably, which is ridiculous when you consider what they are. A scythe is a large curved blade, mounted perpendicularly on the end of a long, branched handle, meant to be wielded horizontally, using both hands and the entire upper body. A sickle is a smaller, crescent-shaped blade, with a shorter handle, held in one hand.

I've had to change the rhyming formula for the first verse to make the changes work:
Sunday out in Ammerwiese
Liese bravely minds the geese there
Then comes Jacob with long strides
Holding his sickle at his side

With this he pushes now and then
At Liese under bodice and hem
He wants to try her, with violence
And all the while he probes her he sings...

Lovely Liese, leave the geese here
I want to have a taste of your skin
The scythe is rusty where blood adheres
Are you friendly? Not to me

He really wants to lick young Liese
Her pear taste would be so pleasing
All her small hairs standing on end
They run to a wheat-filled glen

In the flood of gold, well veiled
Jacob infects the youthful maid
And holds her there until the evening
Then to the child he again sings...

Lovely Liese, leave the geese here
I want to have a taste of your skin
The scythe is rusty where blood adheres
Are you friendly? Not to me

Lovely Liese, leave the geese here
I want to have a taste of your skin
The scythe is rusty where blood adheres
Are you friendly? Not to me

[original lyrics & translation]

I'll keep working on it.

Liese Translation (mk II)

This comes after Rony had a look at my translation:
Sunday in the Ammerwiese
Brave Liese minds the geese
Then Jacob comes running
Holding a sickle in his hand

This he pushes now and then
At little Liese under her skirt and bodice
He wants to taste her, wants to force her
And the boy is singing...

Lovely Liese, leave the geese
I want to taste of your skin
The scythe is rusty with blood
Are you friendly? Not to me

Jacob wants to lick little Liese
And she will taste like pear
Her small hairs standing on end
They hasten to a wheatfield

In a flood of gold, well-hidden
He infects Liese
Holds her in an embrace until evening
And sings to the child

Lovely Liese, leave the geese
I want to taste of your skin
The scythe is rusty with blood
Are you friendly? Not to me

Lovely Liese, leave the geese
I want to taste of your skin
The scythe is rusty with blood
Are you friendly? Not to me


Rony tells me that Ammerwiese doesn't really need to be translated. There is a river called Ammer. I'm glad of this, as I don't think the bunting is a terribly well-known songbird, so 'bunting meadow' isn't going to make huge amounts of sense to most people.

Rony also let me know that Jacob is threatening to kill Liese with his scythe if she's not cooperative, with makes complete sense, given the ominous nature of the blooded blade. I may leave that implied from the words though, rather than trying to spell it out.

Next I will update the LILT for it. Thanks, Rony!

2010-03-26

LILT: Liese 1.0

It's a start:
Sunday out in the bunting Leas
Liese bravely watches the geese
Then comes Jacob with long strides
Holding in his hand a sharp scythe

With this he pushes now and then
At Liese under bodice and hem
He wants to try her, with violence
And all the while he probes her he sings...

Lovely Liese, leave the geese here
I want to have a taste of your skin
The scythe is rusty where blood adheres
Are you friendly? Not to me

He really wants to lick young Liese
Her pear taste would be so pleasing
All her small hairs standing on end
They run to a wheat-filled glen

In the flood of gold, well veiled
Jacob infects the youthful maid
And holds her there until the evening
Then to the child he again sings...

Lovely Liese, leave the geese here
I want to have a taste of your skin
The scythe is rusty where blood adheres
Are you friendly? Not to me

Lovely Liese, leave the geese here
I want to have a taste of your skin
The scythe is rusty where blood adheres
Are you friendly? Not to me

[original lyrics & translation]

Liese Lyrics

These are copyright to UMG, Pilgrim, Rammstein, and anyone else with a slice of the pie. I'm just posting them as a point of reference. I claim no rights.

Eh, enough foreplay. Here they are:
Sonntag auf der Ammerwiese
Hütet Gänse brav die Liese
Da kommt Jakob angerannt
Hält eine Sichel in der Hand

Diese schiebt er hin und wieder
Dem Lieschen unter Rock und Mieder
Er will sie kosten, will sie zwingen
Und der Bub wird dazu singen

Liebe Liese, lass die Gänse
Ich will von deiner Haut probieren
Vom Blute rostig, ist die Sense
Bist du freundlich nicht zu mir

Der Jakob darf vom Lieschen lecken
Und sie wird nach Birne schmecken
Sich kleine Härchen aufgestellt
Eilen sie zum Weizenfeld

In der Goldflut gut versteckt
Hat er die Liese angesteckt
Hält bis zum Abend sie eng umschlungen
Und hat in das Kind gesungen

Liebe Liese, lass die Gänse
Ich will von deiner Haut probieren
Vom Blute rostig, ist die Sense
Bist du freundlich nicht zu mir

Liebe Liese, lass die Gänse
Ich will von deiner Haut probieren
Vom Blute rostig, ist die Sense
Bist du freundlich nicht zu mir

Liese Translation

I'm hoping some native German-speakers will look this over and let me know if I've arsed anything up:
Sunday in the bunting meadow*
Brave Liese minds the geese
Then Jacob comes running
Holding a sickle in his hand

This he pushes now and then
At little Liese under her skirt and bodice
He wants to taste her, wants to force her
And the boy is singing...

Lovely Liese, leave the geese
I want to taste of your skin
The scythe is rusty with blood
Are you friendly? Not to me

Jacob wants to lick little Liese
And she will taste like pear
Her small hairs standing on end
They hasten to a wheatfield

In a flood of gold, well-hidden
He infects Liese
Holds her in an embrace until evening
And sings to the child

Lovely Liese, leave the geese
I want to taste of your skin
The scythe is rusty with blood
Are you friendly? Not to me

Lovely Liese, leave the geese
I want to taste of your skin
The scythe is rusty with blood
Are you friendly? Not to me

* 'Bunting' as in the songbird.

Now to LILT it...

The Goose Girl

I'm thinking of taking on Liese next. Jeremy hasn't translated it yet, so I figure this is a chance to challenge myself a bit...a lot, and try working it out as far as I can myself. This might be a complete disaster, or it may work well. We shall see. In any case, there are a number of existing translations around and a few German friends I can fall back on if I fail.